02/10/2013 Mark Robson

Not again!’ Matt exclaimed.  ‘What is it with me and engines recently?’

  ‘What’s wrong, Dad?’

  ‘I don’t know,’ he admitted.  ‘But this boat has seen better days and while I’m sure she’d be hard to sink, the engine feels like it’s ready to give up the ghost at any time now.’

  ‘Great!’ she replied.

   As if it had heard Matt’s words, the outboard motor spluttered once more and uttered a loud BANG.  The cloud of oily smoke that immediately billowed out behind them was much more substantial this time.  Matt eased back on the throttle, but the damage had already been done.  The engine continued to run, but as Niamh felt the boat slow an awful mechanical clattering sound began to build that sent juddering vibrations through the boat.  With a final grinding metallic protest, the motor stopped and the boat wallowed to a stop.

   ‘Great!’ Niamh repeated, looking all round for any sign of another boat to hail.  There was nothing but sea in all directions.  ‘Of course!’ she muttered.  ‘Why should things start to go any better now?’


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Comment by Robyn Kouw on September 27, 2013 at 2:42

Matt and Niamh looked at each other.                                                                                                                                                “We don’t have a blow-up raft below deck, do we Dad?” Matt ran his long, pale fingers through his stiff brown hair.                                                                                                                                                          “There is, but it’s only big enough for one.” Niamh rolled her eyes,                                                                                                                                                “Well, that’s rather idiotic, isn’t it?!” Matt tapped his foot nervously and with impatience.                                                                                                                                   “Niamh, stay here and I’ll get the raft out. I think that Raneville is just off the coast.”                                                          

 “No, we can’t split up! What if she does sink?!” Matt looked out to sea before standing abruptly,                                                                                                                                        “Niamh, the sea is as calm as can be. Just because the motor’s dead it doesn’t mean she’ll sink. Now, stay here, like the good daughter you are and hopefully we’ll be home by dinner.” As if the sea was offended by  Matt’s comment it began to sway and create vicious, tumbling waves. To make matters worse a distant gunshot sounded, and suddenly fog started to cloud the Father and Daughter. The fog was so thick that they couldn’t see the deck beneath them, making them unsure where to place their feet.  Blindly they tried to find something to support them,

Gianni, St. Mary’s College.

Comment by Rosa Harkin on October 2, 2013 at 9:18

Then suddenly the boat starts sinking.

''Dad, what are we going to do?''

''We have no choice but to grab our life jackets and jump in to the ocean!'' Matt replied.

Matt and Niamh quickly grab their life jackets and slip them on with ease. They rush to the edge of the boat anticipating the roaring waves ready to swallow them. However, as if some miracle occurred, a calmness washes over the ocean and still waters await them. The boat is still in danger though and sinking deeper by the minute. They propel themselves in to the ocean hoping for the best!

They sit in the freezing ocean, watching as the boat sinks before their eyes. They shine their emergency torch, hoping for some help to be approaching. All they can see around them is darkness. What could they possibly do?

All of a sudden, a spot of luck appeared and up they can see a speed boat zooming around.

''Over here!!' They shouted in unison.

The boat approaches. A figure of the driver emerges. Oh no, it was Niamh's worst enemy...McKenzy!

''Oh, are you stuck? Never mind someone will come for you...Maybe in a couple of days HA HA HA!''

And off McKenzy zooms in to the distance....

Comment by Rosa Harkin on October 2, 2013 at 9:26

Year 5, Norbury School - Cameron, Samier, Mudasir, Arbi, Deemah, Joel, Jamila, Brikena, Ami, Myra and Hamza

Comment by Rosie Pike on October 2, 2013 at 10:40

Zig zagging to and fro….

“This is all your fault!” Matt screamed causing the water to ripple.

“My fault, my fault how is it my fault? You’re the one who broke the stupid engine and you’re the reason we’re stuck in this situation” wailed Niamh.

“Be quiet I am trying to think!” Dad interrupted.

The skies turned grey and a dark silhouette swam under the water tickling their feet.

   “Stop kicking me!” screamed Niamh

 “I’m not you idiot”

“Well, if y…you’re not t...then w…who is?” asked Niamh.

Just then they noticed McKenzy coming back in his boat.

“Just came to check that you’re all still drowning this wouldn’t of haven’t to me because I take good care of my boat.” Sneered McKenzy.

Bash, McKenzy’s boat begins to rock. Boom, his boat starts to leak. His white pale face cripples with fear, every bone in his body begins to shake as he realises he is going to die.

No, I’m kidding that’s what I wish I could write. Unfortunately McKenzy


“Oh my gosh my precious boat, my beautiful, beautiful boat well don’t just stand there help me!”


By Megan Reed Clara Hall and Finn Leuzzi

Bishop's Stortford College Prep School

Comment by Victoria Coe on October 2, 2013 at 13:59

“Ok then” replied Matt and helped to get him out,

“Thanks” answered McKenzie.

Struggling around the island, they were scavenging for food and materials. Matt stopped to say “I’m starving we have been hunting for food for 10 days now!” cried Matt. Now they were so hungry they were thinking about cannibalising each other. They were looking for food in the sea. All of a sudden a giant shark leapt out and was heading for Matt! The shark just missed him. It was an unforgettable moment of all his short life. Now that they had nothing to eat, would they survive the island? Would they get home…?  


Orchard Park Primary School                                              

By Kola and Ryley

Comment by Sarah Cook on October 8, 2013 at 0:28

After days on the island they realized they had to do something before they starved to death. Dad suggested they build a raft so they could sail back home. Due to the fact that McKenzy and Niamh were mortal enemies it became very hard to make the raft. They kept tripping each other over and arguing. Matt was getting so sick of them fighting, he said “if you keep fighting I will build the raft on my own and leave you here all alone.”


From then they started to work together because they didn’t want to die on the island. It was hard for them but they managed. As they got closer to finishing the raft McKenzy and Niamh got closer as friends. By the time they finished they were the best of friends. They were playing with each other and laughing at each other’s jokes.


Dad then called McKenzy and Niamh to pick a name for their raft and then to set sail. Niamh picked out a name and then McKenzy carved it out on the side of the raft. The carving on the raft was “TITANIC 2.” Dad mentioned that the Titanic had sunk but both Niamh and McKenzy said together that this Titanic would NOT sink.


The next day they left the stranded island to go home, Dee Why beach. They arrived safely finding posters of them placed by the M.I.A. apparently they had been missed.


They rushed home to get changed then went straight to the police to tell them what had happened. The police then called up McKenzy’s family to tell them that he was all right and they could pick him up. Then Niamh and Matt went home to have lunch with their whole family.


After that day McKenzy and Niamh were the best of friends at school and they told of their adventure over and over again. Eventually their story was sold and a movie was made. Niamh and McKenzy are now stars.



By Renee Lee & Lisa Badaan Christ the King School Australia

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