03/10/2013 Poetry 2 - Dave Cryer 2

The Lake

Winter. A surface

Of ice, dead flat and swirled with

Skated lines of dark.


Spring and a soft sheen

Of light sparks up the engine

To a sprawling sound.


Writing tips from Dave – follow the rules or break the rules – you’ll have a poem either way:


·    For this opener each stanza is a haiku containing 3 lines of 5-7-5 syllables

·    I’ve written it in the present tense

·    The poem invites the reader to look at the lake at different times of the year and day

·    You could think about other aspects of what a lake might contain – the animals, the plants, the light, the people – haiku stanzas often create very strong sensory feelings of sight, sound, touch, taste or smell.


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Comment by Rosie Pike on October 3, 2013 at 11:53

Summer. Warm water.

Dappled beauty, dragonflies

Surfing on the wind


Autumn. Rippled waves,

Softly stroking the shoreline,

As the breeze blows in.          



Vinay Menon, Myles Wheatley and Jamie Munro

Bishops Stortford College

Comment by Lynne Coppendale on October 3, 2013 at 13:03

The seasons

beauty of life,

locked in a case

waiting to be woken


Summer in a flower

Winter, swirl of ice

Autumn in a detail on a leaf

Spring coming out hibernation

Romy White and Kayleigh-May Beaver, Danum Academy, Doncaster

Comment by Jayne Davidson, WHHS, UK on October 3, 2013 at 14:24
Sweaty, burning heat
People emerge from their homes
Drinking in the heat

Golden crispy leaves
Kids enjoy the last bit of warmth

The season of snow
Stinging freezing numb fingers
Creatures go to sleep

Nature comes to life
As if a switch has been flicked
Bedtime is over.

By Gold Luntadila at West Hatch High School

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