13/10/2011 Poem 1 Dave Cryer

Writing tips from Dave – follow the rules or break the rules – you’ll have a poem either way:


  • This opener is written in free verse, so you don’t have to worry too much about the line length or rhythm and rhyme
  • What you do need to concentrate on is making it sound like a set of rules for a game where it’s teens versus adults


Team Teen


The basic objective of this game is to win at all costs,

To beat the other side, the enemy, the adults.

The pitch is a huge endless field.

The teens will gather at one end, the adults at the other.

The crowd will be made up of the younger ones.

Some of them will turn into teens and join you in your battle.

There are many ways you can score points for Team Teen.


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Comment by Debbie Baird on October 13, 2011 at 8:58

But there is only one way to win.
You must turn all the adults to teens.
Points will help you turn them.
But they won’t help you win this game
Once you have got enough points.
To conquer the adults and win.

By Euan from West Kirby Residential School, Wirral

Comment by WP Central on October 13, 2011 at 9:12

You must be swift and cunning 

to persuade the adults to change their allegiance

and persuade them to play with you not against you. 

Stay straight faced, you mustn't give your sneaky rules away

because if they realise what you are doing........

that's it , you will have lost the game.


Bev Humphrey

Write Path Founder 

Comment by Annalise Taylor on October 13, 2011 at 11:43

You don’t want to lose the game.

 Because if you do the adults will come after you

So you better run you better hide.

 You got to jump high high high.

Away from the ground high above

 Don’t look down or they will eat you and crush you

 They will eat you with a tissue.


Olivia and Cambry

International Community School



Comment by zoe skoines on October 13, 2011 at 13:20
The teenagers argue
The parents argue
Who will win the war?
The teens are young and beautiful
The adults are old and wrinkly
Who will win the battle?

The parents are being horrid
Lets start the battle
We'll never surrender
We'll always fight
We wont give in because we will win
Watch the adults sneaky ways

"This is what we are going to do....
We are going to smash down the wall
and run over there
like we just dont care
and turn them into our....
teen slaves!!

Jupiter Class, Year 4, Haynes Lower School
Comment by Nicola Gowing on October 13, 2011 at 15:06

They put there plan to action,

Got home in a fraction,

The teen went to sleep,

While there parents sat and weep.



She got out of bed,

Bit at her mums messy head,

The mum had such a fright,

Went pale and white,

See turned into a teen,

Until she got to eighteen.


By Lizzie Jessica and Phillipa

Great Yarmouth High School . :D

Comment by Dave Cryer on November 1, 2011 at 10:10
The adults didn't come out of this game too well - actually, you all turned it into a kind of war where we wise, good-looking ones got battered to pieces basically! Well done everyone - enjoyed reading this, plus I liked the idea that the teens would eventually grow back into adults again and it would all begin again - a neverending battle. Good stuff!

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