08/10/2013 David Gatward

Jack couldn't swim. And that was a problem for three reasons. One: getting out of school swimming sessions was difficult, not least because the teachers were getting suspicious of the reasons he'd come up with over the years, from family deaths to personal injury and illness. Two: it was difficult to impress a girl by waving at them from the leisure centre cafe, while his mates flirted with them in the semi-nude. Three: he was stuck on a boat, engine dead, and somewhere between him and the horizon was another boat, one that worked - and even if his was working would out run it without even going full throttle - and was crewed by three men who wanted him dead, but only after they used their very unique skills to extract a dozen very important names from his brain. Oh, and a storm was approaching.

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Comment by Adam Lancaster on October 8, 2013 at 9:48

It most definitely was not the best day he'd ever had. He banged the useless engine a couple more times. More in frustration rather than hope. All he managed to do though was tire himself out even more.

He looked back towards the other boat and saw that it was already gaining on him. He had hoped that they would have trouble seeing him as his boat was so so small and obviously completely rubbish. This quite clearly wasn't going to be the case.

His only hope was going to be the other thing was probably going to kill him. The storm. It was certainly blowing in a lot quicker now and the storm clouds that had only ten minutes ago seemed like dots on the horizon, were almost circling up ahead. The air seemed to be alive and Jack's skin tingled like it normally did before a big storm.

If only the storm could help shield him from the other boat he might just be able to get away from them.

Then, almost as if the sky was falling in on him a flash of lightning smashed into the bow of his boat, toppling him into the water

Peter Yr10

Comment by Lorraine French on October 8, 2013 at 10:57

With the thunderstorms rumbling and the lightning bolts clapping, Jack is splashing about in the bitter salty water fighting for his life. His boat lying completely ruined, Jack is trying to float on the water to make sure that he can steady himself. He has a quick thought; if he can find a way to drift on the crashing waves, maybe he will have enough time to think himself out of this life-threatening situation. So he tried to hover on the misty horizon and it was extremely difficult as he could not swim and he had never been stranded in the heavy seas all by himself. Then he sees a top speed boat going at about 70 to 80mph. He tried to signal the boat by waving his hands in the air, but they did not take any notice of Jack.

          Still fighting for his life in the cold brackish water, Jack has a wild look around for more boats. When he turns back to the ruins of his boat, he spots a yellow bag which is floating near him. He puts his arms out to grab the bag. He tears it open, only to find a life jacket which he could have found ages ago. He put it on as fast as possible and he simply glided over the water and the life jacket kept him to water level. After a while he spots the other boat. Not only that the men were turning round to look in his direction.

What should he do?

Sean  & Theo yr7, Trinity School

Comment by Jayne Davidson, WHHS, UK on October 8, 2013 at 12:56
Suddenly, Jack started to wave his arms franticly to catch the boats attention. Waving his hands to and fro, whilst getting thrown around by the waves would be very hard to spot. Jack sighed in relief as he saw the sailors edging towards him then a huge wave dragged him under so the sailors rushed to the rescue. As the sailors dived into the rough waters, one of the sailors just faintly saw a yellow lifejacket and swam towards it. He grabbed the lifejacket and rushed to the surface. It was only when Jack got on the boat that he realized they were no ordinary sailors….

By Harrison
West Hatch High School
Comment by Nikki Heath on October 8, 2013 at 13:51

Jack realised that the so called sailors were … Pirates. Jack was terrified by them, he tried calming himself down by thinking he was at the swimming pool. The pirates were extremely creepy and they had a very big flag with a skull and bones, they had about six prisoners on the ship, they were treated in very poor conditions with only two meals a day and were forced to clean up the ship and cooking the food. The pirates were very vicious and smart and would catch anyone trying to escape; you would have to be really sneaky and silent to escape the boat. All the pirates would do was travel. Jack had already started doing chores for the pirates; he had the most boring days of his life. He had to cook food for them, wash the dishes, sweep any mess and clean the beds then feed them their food “this is disgusting” thought jack, he was almost crying, he wanted to go home, but he realised the only way to escape the boat was to devise the most sneaky, devious plan that he would come up with, who knows what that would be ?




                             Jake P, Werneth School, year7, Stockport, UK

Comment by Allison Painich on October 8, 2013 at 15:45
When it was nighttime, Jack was going to break the prisoners out of prison while the pirates were sleeping. Once they were out, they planned to take row boats from the pirates and quietly escape. They rowed to land and found Jack's house. When Jack got home, he offered the prisoners a place to stay until they could find a home.

Tyler and Brandon
Sallie Humble Elementary
Monroe, Louisiana, USA

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