10/10/2013 Poetry Anthony McGowan

The Shadow on the water

 I lazed upon the sun-scorched beach, and

Watched my tiny, freckled, laughing daughter

Splashing in the waves that washed the sand

When, there! a shadow in the deeper water …



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Comment by Paula Ward on October 10, 2013 at 9:02

 Out of the depths, a shark swam by,

 Rising from the deep of the sea.

 My daughter gave a piercing cry,

 Enough to startle me.


 The water was cold when I dived down deep,

 Sending shivers up my spine.

 I saw my daughter in a mangled heap,

 She was only nine…


George Mahoney and Ollie Curry

Robert Mays School


Comment by Leah Falkingham on October 10, 2013 at 10:19

As I swam down into the deep sea to rescue her,

There was a shark lurking there.

It had lots of brown fur,

As it left, it's remains were a pile of hair.


Then I remembered I had to save the girl,

I grasped for her and took the girl to the surface,

She was as wet as a dog in a puddle!


By Callum, Kieron and Adam - Longbenton Community College, Newcastle.

Comment by Carol Webb on October 10, 2013 at 11:52

I scanned the dock for a helping hand,

I then realised that the threat wasn’t the shadow in the water,

But the everlasting shadow that followed my daughter.


By Joe, Dominic, Stanley and Nyle- Forest Hill Boys, Lewisham

Comment by Adam Lancaster on October 10, 2013 at 13:42

hunting, stalking it murmered to her

it whispered her name over and over

awaiting and seeking only her answer


Jess Yr7

Comment by WP Central on October 10, 2013 at 15:06

But she could not give a final answer 

As I noticed her heart beating faster 

Her face was as white as a sheet

Her eyes like daggers looking up 

Adele, West Kirby residential school 


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