3/3/16 Story 5 Amelia Thorne

The train had come to a halt. The snow whirled and stung their faces.'Line's blocked.' announced the guard gloomily. 'Can't stay here. We'll freeze. We'll have to walk.Come on.' Inverness was behind them, and although she could no longer see the hills of the Great Glen, she could sense them, looming,menacing. She didn't like this place. Never had. 'What - you mean walk to Laggan? In this?'

'Aye. I've no phone signal and the phone in the cab's out. Next train's not for hours.'

‘Just us?’

Kris huddled into her too-thin jacket. Her spirits, already low, sank further. Would anyone worry when her train didn’t arrive? Probably not. 

‘No – there’s one more. A wee laddie.  Asleep in the other carriage. I’ll go and wake him.’

Kris had no desire to be left alone and struggled after the guard. His torch lit up the swirling snow in a swaying shaft of light. It went out as he clambered back onto the train to wake the remaining passenger, and, ‘How could he still be asleep?’ marvelled Kris. The cold worked itself right into her until it hurt. 

The torch beam reappeared, as did the guard, with a small figure huddled behind him.

‘Too young to be travelling on his own surely?’ wondered Kris, and then, as the thought suddenly occurred to her, ‘Where’s the driver?’ 

Before the guard had a chance to answer there came a sound that made Kris’s hair stand on end…

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Comment by Andy taylor on March 3, 2016 at 8:53

BANG!!! The suspicious sound was followed by a mysterious creak from the rusty, dark and wet wood .The sound was getting louder and louder (thud, thud, THUD).

Kris was what her friends called her but she felt like Kristina the little girl who loved being at home with her family.

She was terrified of the sound coming towards her. Kristina’s whole body was getting massive bumps as she was petrified. Kristina was too frightened of the sound coming towards her so she ran as fast as she could but she was to late…


By Lillianne and Phoebe

Easebourne C.E. Primary School

Comment by Tricia Oyston on March 3, 2016 at 10:54

It happened in a flash. An inky shadow appeared behind her as she was sprinting away. It was the guard. He shoved her onto the train tracks, engulfed in convoluted vines.

“Help!” she shrieked with agony. She realised what the booming noise was. The train was thundering towards her, lights blaring. She was blinded for a moment, and when she recovered, she felt the warmth of holding her.  She turned her head and a shiver slithered up her spine as their eyes met. Those eyes like gooey caramel melted her trembling heart.  

“Who are you?” she whispered softly.

“It’s me, the boy from the other carriage, I’m called Alec,”

“I’m Kristina, what happened?

Alec replied with a voice as smooth as honey, “The guard and the driver, they’re kidnappers, I heard them plotting while I was pretending to be asleep. They were planning to capture you for ransom. They pretended the train broke down and cleared everyone out. The guard was trying to seize you but pushed you instead. Don’t worry, I’ll keep you safe.”

He shook his tousled brown curls and smiled at me and for a moment I had hope. Then disaster struck, the driver strode out of the carriage, while twirling his neatly-trimmed moustache, sneering.

“Alec what are you doing my son, grab the cursed girl!”

“What,” Kris stared in disbelief, pulling away from the boy, “He’s your father! I thought I could trust you”

“No!” he cried “I love you!”

She bolted….

By Eva, Nawar and Hina 7Z

Sheffield High School



Comment by Emily Seed on March 3, 2016 at 11:55

She then looked behind her to see that Alec was catching up to her. Alec was carrying a knife! This made her run faster. She was unsure what this meant, was he showing to much passion or was he actually trying to kill her. She had no time to find out. she scrambled for her life. Her legs ached and she knew she would not be able to run much further. It was at this moment that she realised this was the end...

By Mohamad, Larry, Teo and Theo

The Charter School


Comment by Nicola Gowing on March 3, 2016 at 12:45

She ran as fast she could. Her chest pounding as she trips over a stone, her face hitting the cold snow felt like hitting a concrete wall. Her life was flashing before her eyes. She felt helpless, as Alec raises the knife. She cowers into a corner for her life, but suddenly a hooded figure appears out of nowhere and he rugby tackles Alec and disarms him and chucks it in the icy river, Alec ran away “who are you?” asked Kris “I’m Zack” said the figure. Zack had hair white as snow and has eyes as red as rubies, “where did you come from?” asked Kris “I came from the far-back of the train” Zack said quietly “We should take refuge in the cabin near here” Kris bellowed. The cabin was made of rock and wood, it had a fireplace and a couch. As they fall asleep in the cabin… 

By Brandon Greenaway , Logan Judge and Riley Mitchell

Great Yarmouth High School

Comment by Nicola Gowing on March 3, 2016 at 12:49

But suddenly Kris came out of nowhere and hugged the cursed girl then he grabbed her and took her into a shed , after one hour of waiting they took a peek but he was there standing with a bloody knife, it seemed as if  he had killed other people during that hour! Then behind them they saw a door and used that door to escape … but if they wouldn’t of hurried they could’ve been killed as he glared at her with relief he kissed her, then she frantically pushed him away because he is her father that was the reason she didn’t feel the true love. Then Alec ran up to them to stop Kris because Alec’s who was in love with the cursed girl. Alec pushed Kris away and kissed the cursed girl. She hesitated. She slowly backed away because she wasn’t sure if she liked him in the first place. He jabbed her because she didn’t wat to kiss him but somehow she …… SURVIVED!!! Of the curse she had, the place he jabbed her, she recovered, because she’s immortal! It turned out she was a beautiful gorgeous stunning ANGEL!!!!Then she flew away into the sky and left them to survive by themselves!  The story continues as …….


By Amy, Denisa and Wiktoria

Great Yarmouth High School

Comment by Karen King - Oakbank School on March 3, 2016 at 14:18

The two boys Kris and Alec did not know what to do as they have never been in this type of situation before.

“What shall we do?” questioned Kris to Alec.

“How am I meant to know, I’ve never been stranded and not known how to get back!” Screamed Alec as loudly as he could. Just then a wild tiger pounced out from out of no where. And started to circle the two of them , it roared and came straight for them. “AAAARRRRGGGGHHHH!” Wailed the two of them as they just narrowly dodged the attack of the fearsome tiger. The tiger growled as its eyes narrowed down on its prey, the two boys, it leapt out at them and pinned Alec to the ground however Kris just managed to escape. “HELP! KRIS! PLEASE!” YELLED ALEC ALOUD. Kris heard every thing but escaped into the woods.

The tiger licked Alec to see if he had enough flesh on him and it seems that he did because he kept licking him….. Just then Kris came back with a stick on fire and started to chase the tiger. The tiger speedily ran out of the way.

“Thank you!” said Alec, gratefully.

“No need to apologise!” said Kris, fearlessly.

At that moment, he heard a volcano rumbling. . . . . . . . . . . . . .

Comment by Karen King - Oakbank School on March 3, 2016 at 14:18

By Imadur and Adam

Oakbank School

Comment by Emily Seed on March 3, 2016 at 14:53

As she flew away stream of tears gushing down the heaviness of the tears dragged her down to the murky ground. Although she was mortal she felt a new life as she touch the ground her wings tuned in to arms. She could see a gloomy shadow behind her. She ran like a flash light all you could you was glitter as she travelled. The shadow followed her and came closer and closer Kris stood as still as a statue.  The figure bit her neck a stream of blood appeared little did she know the figure turned her to a vampire…….

by: Beyza,Fanta.Maria and Katy

The Charter School

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